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In the past,the holiday is often at home to visit friends and relatives or going shopping to buy a lot of delicious food new clothes and so on ever go to the park to have a good time.Maybe it is the best way people to spent of a happy new years time. Noweday, everyone rathe have they holiday to have a visiting or climb the mountain than stay at home ,it seems that people have more way to enjoy they holiday . But what's the reason lead to this problem? In my opinions, the best reason is that in the present people have a better life than before so that they have more money to improve their life quality on the other hand alse showes our county have a fast develop.
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