行文流畅,但衔接词比较少;文中句子偏简单,可增加从句使用量;文中词汇表达较为丰富准确,但存在单词拼写错误。
My hometown is not large but it was beautifui.There used to be plenty of trees around it.A river ran through ang there was a lot of fish frolic in it.The housees were small and ugly.The streets use to be narrow.The peopie who lived in the town worked hard to make living.With time going by,the town has changed a lot.The stand lots of tall buildings.Lots of cars run on the road. With the development of industry, people are faced with the problem of a worsening environment.There are less ang less trees and fish. now it is our duty to solve the pollution.Let us take action to make differences to the environment.I believe it will be better and better.