文章结构不错,使用了丰富的衔接词和过渡词;作者能较灵活地使用词汇表达,但要多积累高级词汇;句式变化不明显,另外要多多加强从句在文中的比例。
Last weekend,I went to the Beijing Wildlife Park.There were some visitors and some monkeys were threw food by visitors.Some of them played with dogs and other animals.They were very friendly each other.At the same time.It's very important to protect the enviroment,so we shouldn't throw rubbish everywhere in the park.Actually,Human beings like do anything they want,but protect animals is the same way protect ourselves.