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The Dragon Boat Festival, which is in memory of QuYuan, is one of the most important festivals in China.It was an ancient festival that have began since 2000 years ago.And on the day every year,students can have a holiday. As we all know,there are some customs and habits about the festival. First, we eat zongzi and have a dragon-boat racing.Second, we make some sachets and children wear them playing happily.Third, we sing the poems which were written by QuYuan and feel the feelings of him.It is unbelievable. In summary,The Dragon Boat Festival is the day that makes people miss QuYuan and make children happy and unforgettable.It can produce enormous power.As the important culture in our country,we should protect it and cherish the beatiful day.