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Nowadays,there is a hot debate on whether college students should hire cleaners in their daily life.Some people think that it is good enough to do so because this may make students live easily. But in my eyes,the disadvantages of hiring cleaners to help them clean their dormitory outweigh the advantages. First,hiring cleaners in their daily life is harmful to them.Hiring cleaners to help them clean dormitory will make them lazy.And as college students,it is necessary to keep independent thinking in their mind. We should master some basic things of life. As time went by,we get older and older,and gradually we have to leave our friends and parents to marry.If we can do nothing, it will give rise to many serious problems. Only can we do everything in person, we can have a regular and beautiful life. Second,hiring cleaners in their daily life is,in fact,not a wise idea. Because of too much time in college school, we have enough time to clean the dormitory with our roommates,and I think it's very easy for us. In addition, if we hire cleaners,we must give money to them.I think it is,in essence,a way to waste money. If we don't do housework in person,we can never do them very well. It is true that hiring cleaners in our daily life may have some advantages.For example,it may gain time of students to study hard.But in my eyes this behavior is not good.In all, it is necessary for our students to have a consciousness that tries their best to do everything well in person around them.