恰当的使用了过渡词和衔接词,衔接手法做的很棒;作者能较准确地使用丰富的词汇,但请认真检查词汇的拼写;作者可适当增加词汇的丰富度,部分句子有错误。
In these days,shopping on line is becoming a fashion.Due to it's convenience and effective.It's not only has many advantages but also has a quantities of questions. Therefore I'd like to give you some advice.Firstly,you must be cautious about your information.Secondly,you should be concentrate on the good.The picture is not ture.At last,you have to konw how to pay more safety.
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