文中单词拼写做的很棒,再多积累些词汇就更好了;从句不足,简单句比重高;可适当增加连接词和衔接词的使用;请注意分段。
my favorite sport is playing football.i love to play football by chance.one day,on my way home i picked a football,then i played football with my friends.it was made me fell very happy.next,i often did exercises and had competitions with my classmates,we all like football.my favorite football star is BH.he is very cool!i want to be a professional football player in the future.