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I am born in province of Guangdong.There is no doubt that Guangzhou where is oer of the richest city in China is the most important city in Guangdong.Canton Tower is sign of Guangzhou.It is the most beautiful building that I have ever seen,so it pays to see.An advantage of Canton Tower is that it is so high and very special.There are a flower squre and Zhujiang River nearby it and a number of activities at night.So is romantic enviroment that lovers like to appointment in here. It is universally acknowlaged that prosperous of Zhujiang.Many foreign travel in here as soon as happy new year.What a fun traveling it go to here!The reason why I will take my friends to see.