句法知识很棒,若增加一些从句的使用,文章会更出色;文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用高级词汇就更好了;采用了简单的衔接手法,行文流畅。
I am born in province of Guangdong.There is no doubt that Guangzhou where is one of the richest city in China is the most important city in Guangdong.Canton Tower is a sign of Guangzhou.It is the most beautiful building that I have ever seen,so it pays to see.An advantage of Canton Tower is that it is so high and very special.There are a flower squre and Zhujiang River nearby it and a number of activities at night.So is romantic environment that lovers like to appointment in here. It is universally acknowledged that prosperous of Zhujiang.Many foreign people travels in here as soon as happy new year.What fun traveling it go to here!The reason why I will take my friends to see.