可适当增加连接词和衔接词的使用;文中句子偏简单,可增加从句使用量;文中词汇表达稍欠丰富,注意文中少数拼写错误。
I have a good friend. She is a beautiful girl who has long black hair, two big black eyes and a red mouth. she is good at singing. She is a clever girl and She likes reading books , playing computer games and chess. she is nice girl beacause she often helps us. Our classmates like her very much.