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Nowadays Online shopping has become more and more popular ,especially among young people.Many people find it more convenient to buy stuff through Online shopping and the items on line is often cheaper than those in supermarket. Online shopping also give the customers more choices.However there are many problems with it.The customers sometimes receive inferior goods ,not the items that the supplier advertising online.When there are delivery delays,people have to wait more time to receive the thing they have bought.So when we buy thing online,we must make sure the supplier has a good reputation through reading the comments of other customers.This can help you avoid buying things from unreliable shoppers. Secondly,you can set a deadline of delivery,so that you will not have to wait extra time.In all,as long as we take care,Online shopping will become more convenient way for us to buy goods.
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