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In China,there is a saying that"Conton Tower is slim waist".In the light of this,I will recommend Canton Tower as the first destination of my foreign friend's trip to China. Canton Tower is located in Tianhe district Guangzhou where is in Guangdong province.There is no doubt that it is the most building that I have ever seen。Thanks to its beautiful and width,famous singer enjoy to hold concert in here.There are flowers square and Zhujiang river nearby it. Flower lines the square with various flowers,filling the air with sweet scents.It features clear river,wide square and colorful light at night,which is a feast for the eyes,so a lot of lovers like appointment in here. People travels in here as soon as Happy New year.What fun traveling it go to here!