文中词汇表达较丰富恰当,但高级词汇稍显不足;作者句法知识很棒,适当增加从句的使用,会取得更不错的成绩;文中衔接词丰富。
In China,there is a saying that"Conton Tower is slim waist".In the light of this,I will recommend Canton Tower as the first destination of my foreign friend's trip to China. Canton Tower is located in Tianhe district Guangzhou where is in Guangdong province.In addition,it is universally acknowledged that the second highest tower in the world.There is no doubt that it is the most building that I have ever seen.By climbing the tower,we can see Guangzhou view..Thanks to its beautiful and width,famous singer enjoy to holds concert in here.There are flowers square and Zhujiang river nearby it. Flower lines the square with various flowers,filling the air with sweet scents.It features clear river,wide square and colorful light at night,which is a feast for the eyes,so a lot of lovers like appointment in here. People travels in here as soon as Happy New year.What fun traveling it go to here!Thus,it pays to see Canton tower with my foreign friend.