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Along with the development of technoloy more and more digiral products coming into our life.Such as ceil-phone,laptop,camera and so on.These products make our life changed. Nowadays, it is common to use smart phone.Many people like read news from our phones because it's convinent and fast,besides we can get the latest news at the first time no matter where you are.Digitization make our life easier we can have online-courses,netmeeting,buy food and clothes on the Internet.We are at a Digital age consequently,were more confortable than before. But everything has two sides and digitization is not an exception it has disadvantages too.It bring us convenient but also safty problem.A case in point is that personal information leakage and Internet security problem. All in all, we are at Digital age now, all it's advantage and disadvantage we have to accept .