作者词汇量偏少,但单词拼写做的不错;句式变化不明显,另外要多多加强从句在文中的比例;没有能够有效地使用连接词和过渡词。
Today, we will talk about get on-line.The computer is more and more popular.It has many advantages and many disadvantages. For example, the student can use computer to learn more knowledge,and play the game,make the people smart. But some students indulges in the internet, study result decline.So I give you some advices,you can use internet at home,but in the school ,you can't use internet .