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My hometown is a small town, The people here are frindly. The river is clear, fish in the water play. The town house is very beatuiful, house walls spread on many colour, is like rainbow. But at the time change, this is gonna. right now my beatuiful home town is tall buildings. The new town would have been unrecognisable to original inhabitants. The river is not clear, the fish in the river was less, who make the town become so bad?