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My hometown is a small town,and the villages here are friendly. The river is clear, fish in the water play. The town house is very beautiful, house walls spread on a lot of colours, is like rainbow. Nonetheless at the time change, this is gonna. Right now, around tall buildings my beautiful home town. The new town would have been unrecognisable to original inhabitants. The river is not clear, the fish in the river was less, who is make the town become so bad?