作者词汇表达丰富度要继续提升,高级词汇使用过少;文中从句使用不丰富;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词。
In the start of 2013, our president Xi Jingping spake a oration, demand us economy,against the waste. As a student,we should economy and saving energy. For example, turn off the light when we leave the room, close the button of water. In the family, we needn't buy something luxury,and eating all the food in our bowl. beside, the most important,it's don't waste time,because the time is money.