托福Toefl作文模拟题附范文 第52篇:草率的判断是否可信

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There was many people whose they had very big achievement to help many others . but they also hurt many people in history. but now ,they have been praised by modern history . what is the reasonwith this ,Because their achievement big than their fault . they helped people is much than injured . So I think we shouldn't judged people's achievement accroding to how much they help others judge apeople's achievement is should look from whether contribution big than fault The great emperor qin shi huang with established first dynosty of feudalism ,he had been called great emperor by modern history, In fact he killed many people and region country with means of atrocity but this is never hide his feat in which defeated the other of six country and established the first dynasty of chinese history . So he's contribution is big than fault. as well as Our great leader chairman mao he had maked many worse decision in his old age,but is isn't cover the communist party and chinese people beated all rectionary and estblished new china in his lead under Just like our another great leader said we would do many thing in dark if we haven't chairman mao. So that in my opiniom judge achievement about the people. We shouldn't be accroding to how much they help others . We should be look his contrbution whether big than his fault. because, Haven't the prefect man inworld