文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用高级词汇就更好了;句法知识不错,多多加强复杂句的练习;没有能够有效地使用连接词和过渡词。
Recently, in the south of our city has meet haze weather, it take many inconvenience in the life. First, people's healthy. As we know, haze weather is ill health for body.Second, haze weather influent people going out, because we can't see clear in the city.So i give some advices for environment protection. We can plant a lot of trees, and use common transport.