文中单词拼写做的很棒,再多积累些词汇就更好了;过渡词和衔接词不饱和,文章行文较为流畅;简单句比重稍微偏高,注意极个别句子错误。
My hometown is Tonghua and it is a very small village. The city located in Jilin province. It is a nice city,person is friendly, when spring coming you can climb the mountains and go sightseeing rivers, you can go fishing in the summer, In autumn you can walk on the yard. it is so exciting to feel. The best season is winter, you can skating and eat hot pot. The famous place is Wunv mountain.it is the best mountain in my hometown,more girls like singing at the top of mountain,in the mountain you can see all views. The best food is bake meat.you can buy more meat to eat and felt in this hometown.