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I remember in my childhood,my hometown was very beautiful.There was plenty of trees around it,the water in the river was clear,some fish was swimming.The house was simple,and the street was small,people worked hard but their life was poor.Now,my hometown has been changed,there are many tall buildings and factories,there are many cars.Enviorment was very serious because of industry's product,less trees and little fish.I am very worried about my hometown,where is my beautiful hometown? pollution is very serious,we must act immediately ,call our beautiful hometown back.