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My hometown has changed a lot over the past ten years.When I was a child,there were a lot of trees which surrounds the town.The river is clear and the fishes were swimming happily.The streets were narrow and the houses were not beautiful.People who lived in the town worked hard and lived a difficult life.Now,tall buildings are all over the town.Drivers are driving on the street.But the trees and fishes are reducing rapidly.We must try our best to prevent our town from being destroyed.