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my favorite sport My favorite sport is play football.Play football not only impove our body but also boring me happy. My favorite start is bekehanmu who is from english and my best dream is become a professionall player like bekehanmu. By chance one day,in my go home way where near my home pick a football .I play football with my firend when is my first play football. I love it since i pick it.