从句数量偏少;文中词汇较灵活,但要注意积累高级词汇,拼写错误也要注意;上下文衔接稍显不流畅。
Recently, the haze weather has pappened to many cities in the north of China. This weahter give some disadvantages for the lives of people. For example,firstly the haze weather made lots of people disease not to go to school for students. Secondly, the haze weather made traffic events because of the low visibility. For that haze weather had caused so much inconvenience, so we all make endeavor to elimiate that. the people needing go out should put on the subway or by bus not car in order to dismiss the of the hazed thing to the air. the poisonous factory should transfer to remote sits from the big city or place with mass of human.