可适当增加复杂句和从句的使用;作者词汇使用较为丰富熟练,单词拼写方面要更仔细;层次欠清晰,衔接成分很少。
Recently our school makes active to protecting environments starting ourselves actives. It is our every people's duty to protect the environments. Because the environment will make effects of the people's heath, our the quality of our living. and poisonous to the other living on the earth. what's more, the bad envionments usally cause the traffic aciddents. so we must do some thing for ourselves. I suggest we go outside take public transportation, or walk, ride bike not drive cars. we should plant some trees to absorbed the poisonous atmosphere.