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作者词汇表达丰富度要继续提升，高级词汇使用过少；正确句子比例很高，但需多多加强从句的使用；可适当增加连接词和衔接词的使用。
My hometown is in HangZhou,ZheJiang.As we all know,it's a very famous view place in China.There are many beautiful views in there and many nice people.Now,let us see this city. First of all,we can go to the west lake.Many tourists will go there see the view and taking many photos.Secondly,we can have a fun experience to pick the tea.It is very interesting.And than,you can drink a cup of tea of LongJing in the afternoon.It's so relaxing.Finally,we can go the HeFang street.There are many delicious snacks.Many people like to go there have fun. Welcome to China,there also have many famous history views.It is believed that my hometown will let you satisfied with it.Come on.
