文中词汇表达较丰富恰当,但学术词汇稍显不足;文章结构不错,使用了丰富的衔接词和过渡词;句式变化较为明显,可适当增加从句的使用。
How to improve school safety Recently,school safety becomes a social focus.School safety is a rather important problem.Everyone is supposed to make great effort enable to keep students safe. Now,I provide some measures for everyone about this problem.Above of all,I think that security guards ought to check anyone who wants to enter the campus,and learn ahout what he want to do.In addition,security guards should look around the campus orderly in order that they can keep students and teachers away from danger.Besides,not only keeping safe is security guards' duty but also students need to be told that they mustn't go to the dangerous areas and face gangsters,kidnappers or bad man alone.The last but not the least,from now on,all people are supposed to act so that students can grow healthily. In a word ,it's the most important for students to keep safety in mind whatever they do.