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Idol worship As is depicted in the picture,the first picture is a man who writed "beckham" in his face. The second is a man who spend 300 yuan on making a hair style like beckham is cutted hair by barber in the barbershop. The drawing reflects a common social phenomenon and is really thought-provoking. With the development of society, a sea of questions happened. For instance, the increasing people are adoring stars in various ways crazily like in the piture. The reason is that individuals, nowadays, have more time and energy to do other things except work and study. Besides, idol worship can satified their vacuous heart, let their delighted and excited as well. What'more, some features of the star appeal to them and they can do something which the common person badly want to while can't do. I do believe that we can worship our favorite idol with a wise attitude. The first thing we should understand is that the star is also a common person, they can't do anything well, thus we should not blind to idolize. Next, learning the good quality and behaviour of them is neccesary to us. The last not the least, treating a thing with reason not follow the herd.