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David, How are you? I got your information from internet. Please you allow me to introduce myself. I am Li Hua. I am a middle student, I am living in Shanghai. I like stamp collecting and all kinds sports. I am interested in English, especialy English songs. I can sing a lot of English songs. I can sing English songs for you if we will meet in future. My classmater want to have net friends, too. Can you help us? I will happly if I have a chance to visit English . I hope to meet you in Shanghai, too .