字数:200满分:100分
拼写做的很棒,学术词汇可适量增加;文中应适当增加从句和长难句的使用;全文结构较为严谨,应适当增加文中衔接词的使用。
As is depicted in the two pictures,the first picture is a man who wrote "beckham" in his face. The second is a man who spend 300 yuan in making a hair style like beckham is cut hair by barber in the barbershop. The drawing reflects a common social phenomenon and is really thought-provoking. With the development of society, a sea of questions happened. For instance, the growing people are pursuing stars in various ways crazily like in the picture. The reason is that individuals, nowadays, have more time and energy to do other things except work and study. Besides, idol worship can meet their heart, let their delighted and excited as well. What'more, some of the characteristics of star attracts individuals .Finally, they can do some ordinary people badly want to do and can't do. I do believe that we can worship our idol with a sensible attitude. The first thing we should understand is that the star is also a common person, they can't do anything well, thus we cannot blind to idolize. Next, learning the good quality and behaviour of them is necessary to us. The last not the least, treat a thing sanely and don't follow the herd.