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These photos mirror a widespeard phenomenon among young people, which is called "idol worship". As can be seen from the photo on the left, a fan puts "beckham", the name of a football star, on his face. Similarly, in the photo on the right, a barber is giving the young man a haircut according to the hairstyle of beckham. In fact, there is nothing wrong with the phenomenon. On the one hand, with a idol to admire, young people are encouraged to strive for excellence in whatever they do. From these stars, young people know that he must work hard if he wants to achieve the same successes as those made by their idols. On the other hand, we can't ignore the fact that nowadays some people are misled by the blind idol worship. For example, some people think they can become famous overnight through imitating the hairstyle, fashion style and so on. Actually, this is an impossible dream. In short, we should take an objective attitude towards the phenomenon. For one thing, young people should be ware of the positive effect of it on their growth. For another, the correct guidance should be given to the young people. Only in these ways can they benefit more from admiring the stars.