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Nowadays people are becoming more and more caucious abou the risks exsiting in our daily lifes.The world and the technology changes so fast and our chances of investing become more and more ,but we still remember one principle:it is unwise to put all eggs in one basket. Why should we do so?Of course,to avoid or cut down the risks.With the development of the technology and the economy,our life become better and better and we become more rich and many people have extra money to invest .And there are also all kind of investment projects for us to choose.But when we invest ,we must know that the risks always follow the intersts,so it is really unwise for us to put all our money on one project.Because if we put all of our money on one task ,then we need to bear great presure and risks.Once this project fails, we will lose everthing.But risks are always existing in our daily life,for example ,we may be checked out to have a kind of serious desease and we need a large amount of money but all of our money are invested on a project and it still gets no income.Then this may drive us crazy.But if we invest on diffrent projects and then we may receive total diffrent results .Maybe on this project we get some loss but on another one,we may get some profit.So we really need to invest variously.In this way ,not only can we cut down our pressure but also we can inprove our ability to defend the risks. From what I have said above,I can safely draw this conclusion that only by putting eggs in diffrent baskets can our life be safer and colorful .
