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I have a good friend, his name is Jerry, who is ten years old this year. He was born in xi'an city shanxi province. His hair is very black, and the eyes are bright. He likes riding bicycle with me usually. he is very careful,when meet questions,he often ask some "why". he likes food very much,and do it by himself sometimes.