文章词汇表达比较灵活,学术词汇的使用要继续加强;作者句法不错,但是文章整体句子稍微偏短;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词。
How Should Parents Help Children to Be Independent? Nowadays,a lot of parents do all things for their children.Such as dressing eating and education.But is this good for children?The answer is absolutely not.In modern society there are many people that don't have a simple skill which people make living by.That's all because the parents do everything for the children.Now let me talk about how should parents help children to be independent. In the one hand,parents should teach children how to do the simple things for daily life.Such as washing cooking and cleaning up room.What's more,when he falls down,don't give him a hand but a smile,encouraging him to stand up by himself.On the other hand,parents must give confidence to children.Tell them that they can do all things by themselves. For children's independent,parents can try any way to this.