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With the devolopment of the economic,it is becoming fashion on online shopping.so many people focus on this phenomemon,parts of think it is advantage for us,because we don't need to go shopping ,which can buy anything you requered,however ,other people think that it disadvantage for society,when everyone is going to buy everything on online just stay at home,how abut the shop? It's means anthing for us,meanwhile,we even needn't communicate with anybady,just facing the computer? In my point of view,i agree to anyone on online shopping,on the one hand,it's really convinience for us ,that can be save our most of time when we are busing for our study or work,on the other hand ,so many style show us in online shop,it's better chioce for us absolutely once we feel tired so much. So,i agree to on online shopping,and when we are freely,people also can go shopping.
