过渡词很丰富,衔接词同时使用的恰到好处;作者在句法层面做的很棒;文章用词有些单一,请加强单词拼写的检查;请提高文章内敛性,段落和句子要围绕主题展开。
Creating a Green Campus In recent years,Creating a green campus is becoming more and more important and urgent as a result of the bad situation,such as violence,leaving litter everywhere and so on. The green campus we want to creat is not only the green situation but also the green culture.The green situation cannot decide whether we can creat the green compus,but the green culture can decide what the green compus is and how the green compus is. As far as I am concerned,to creat the green campus,on the one hand,we should advocate students keeping compus clear together.On the other hand, the school should offer a safe and clean situation for students to study in the daily life! In this way,I believe our school will become more and more beautiful!