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First of all, I'm very congraduated on foreign friend to my hometown. As you known, I come from HuBei, JingZhou. My town has been called "The rice and fish town", it means my hometown has many wonderful food, and has a series of good place to visit. In the first, I will bring you to watch The Old Wall of JingZhou, which had been built up in SanGuo prider, it though on three thousand years, and it has a great history mean. The second place is The hool of nature, it has many stone that own itself's shap, has dragon, snaker,and people,and so on. Very wonderful. My hometown has many famous place, I'll guide you to watch.