衔接成分太少,文章结构欠佳;请作者增加词汇表达的丰富度,另外文中有较多拼写错误;文中从句的使用偏少。
I have a good friend,he name is XiaoMing.He have two black eyes and black hair.I very like he.I veryday is very happy,He like eat beer and bear and apple,banana.oneday,our blackschool will home,see a rick,Both feel afraid. so,He asked "can l help you?",I listen hart very good!Anywhere,I from china,like pingpangball,baskerball and football!