教育部——the Ministry of Education
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As we all knows ,healthy is the basics of life so if we could excercise an hours everyday we will have a better body condition to work and study well.The Ministry of Education also adivice yuang people, expercialy the students it's better to exercise an hour everyday and put forward national student sports program,the slogan of the plan is: everyday do exercise an hour,health work fifty years ,a happy life for a lifetime. Expercialy the seniors three students ,they will facing the univercity entrance exam and need go over everyday but no time to exercise.But in mey opinions I think even though the senior three students they are also need exercise but very need have it, one hand exercise can help we have a clear mind so that we will study well ,on the other hand exercise can cultivite our outgoing personality ,it well have a good effect for our future.