GRE写作Issue模拟题:The Importance of Science and Art

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The importance of the Art Nowadays we human beings are living in a scientific world. The science makes our lives more convenient than before, to some extent, improving our living quality.It seems that art is doing nothing to us, just like a vase.As the matter of fact, the science and the art are equally important, both providing the better elements for us. First of all, comparing with science of its physical enjoyment, art contributes its spiritual satisfaction to us. In modern society, based on the high living quality, gradually,people are becoming lazier than before. Automatic machines occupy most of Manual labor.With the work efficiently done,people can space more time to do the other things.Unforunately, many people can not arrange their time ,which make them feel hollow.The art can properly fill their inner emptiness so that they can have a happier life. second, the art is the medicine towards some psychological diseases. For example, Mozert's music can treat some patients who have depression illness. The soft music has a good effect on flower's growing.third, the art ,such as Some paintings and music, can ease people who under the pressure of their work, helping them relieve the nerve. As we pick up our phone or network video to contact our friends and families to express our missing and save inner emptiness, why don't we think about just let the art around us ? High technology maybe just can fill our inner hollowness, but not forever.Art always can accompany with us,for it is not only for physic,but the mentality.