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To: Mary Chen, From: Li Ming Date:Dce.23rd,2008 I will go to Beijing for a week tomorrow ,but the New Year’s Day ia coming ,I can’t discusst the festival with other workmates .So ,it’s the time for you to organiza the people for the festical about how to hold a pary .Finally ,tell me the time and place you diside on and what you prepare .It is up to you to do this thing ,I think you will do it well. Yours, Li Ming