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Now, many pets are fashion, so many people like to feed a pet, because it is clever and beautiful. Absolutly, many students in university also want to get one. There would be a big problem, should pets be forbidden in dormitory? Some people think it is not a big problem, if someone who wants to get a pet, he should take good care of his pet, sometimes we can have a great sight, it should not be forbidden in dormitory. There is agreement oppion, so it must be some disagreement views. Another people do not like pets, they think the pets
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