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Now, many pets are fashion, so many people like to feed a pet, because it is clever and beautiful. Absolutly, many students in university also want to get one. There would be a big problem, should pets be forbidden in dormitory? Some people think it is not a big problem, if someone who wants to get a pet, he should take good care of his pet, sometimes we can have a great sight, it should not be forbidden in dormitory. There is agreement oppion, so it must be some disagreement views. Another people do not like pets, they think the pets is dirty,and it might be ill, eventually, many illness are brought by the pets
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