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It's very happy to have an opportunity to introduce you about my hometown, which is a small town in Anqing city of Anhui province. I want to tell you a story right now. That is , the biggest city called Anqing and the smallest city called Huizhou in Anhui province. When we put the names of these two cities together, it spells the word "Anhui". Is't it interesting? To the real point, I lived in my hometown for 17 years, until I entered into the university. When I was young, my hometown was surrounded by many green-trees, and a lot of rivers came out of the Changjiang-River. At that time people were poor, and our houses were also very simple, but we felt also very happy. However a lot of things have changed today. With the development of my hometown's economy, people get more richer, but the deterioration of the environment get harder too. Either fishes or trees have disappeared now. People realize the most important thing is fixing pollution and protecting the environment, otherwise our hometown is no longer our hometown.