作者能较灵活准确地使用词汇表达,但高级词汇的积累还有很大的空间;语句间的衔接成分用的不错,同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富;使用了部分简单的长难句,可适当增加一些复杂的长句。
I went to BeiJing wildlife zoo for a visit last weekend. So great many of what I saw that I would like to put down on this paper. There were an overwhelming number of visitors in the zoo, who feed the monkey, furthermore, played with the tigers as well. It occurs to me that how harmonious the relationship between human and animal after this experience. Moreover, it is imperative for all of us to treat animal in good deed. Nevertheless, it also hardly insignificant for us to protect environment such as don't throw wastes at your will in the zoo. last but not least, the importance of protecting animal is in effect what does the same to ourselves, and it's fairly vital to be under the awareness of our human being.