文中学术词汇使用较少,但单词拼写做的很棒;文中应增加一些长难句的使用,会为文章添彩;行文稍显不流畅,应增加文中衔接词的使用。
Dear Sir Or Madam, I traveled to a world-famous attraction with your corporation several days ago.But I found some places were to be improved in your management. In the first place,the day-long excursion down to the beach and back failed to live up to expectations.Although the scenery was attractive,the bus ride was unbearable because of the noises that the surly driver played on the radio at will.Secondly,the hotel we lodged in was not the five-star one as you originally promised.Finally,the room we lived in was full of foul smell and the toilet was out of order. I sincerely hope that you can take my complaint into serious consideration and make some improvement in your service.I look forward to hearing from you at your earliest convenience. Yours truly, Zhang Wei