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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing the letter for the purpose of asking you to help find a child in a remote area to whom I want to offer financial help. The candidate who need to obtain some aid should amply meet the following requirements.To begin with,he must be a very poor boy or girl and truly in need of help.In addition,he must be self-motivated and keen to learn.Finally,he must be willing to return to his hometown after graduation from university.For my part,I will send him a certain sum of money each semester until he finishes his higher education. Thanks a lot for your due attention to this letter.Your prompt reply will be highly appreciated. Yours sincerely, Zhang Wei