作者词汇量偏少,也有些单词拼写错误;加强一些长句和复杂句的使用;文章结构不够严谨,应增加过程性词汇的使用。
My favorite sports is football. I enjoyed football by chance.because i pick up a football in the way back, then i played food with my friend.Since then i have become football lover. In order to improve i usually train hard football skill with my classmate , and take part in competition.My favorite star is David from the Britain. I hope to become a professional football player. then i play football with David . Do you like playing football? welcome to join in football lover.