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My favorite sport Playing sports is good for our health. We should spend more time playing sports. During playing sports, you will feel comfortable. It's a very good way to make our body more stronger. one day, On my way to my home, I found a football.It made me very excited.Then i played football with my friends.All of us were very happy.From that time i fall in love with football.I often practise playing football with my classmates. We win many fooyball matches. My fovorite football star is Bake. He is very intelligent. I hope i can be a professional football player in the future.I will try my best to achieve my dream